Date: 2009-03-01 08:49 pm (UTC)
Sorry I'm late, but just wanted to say that this was pretty awesome :) I like how Jiguro was a presence in Balsa's life even before he saved her, and the subtle effects he had on her. Also liked how she "learned that recklessness was not the same as bravery" and how we can see how even as a child she could be brave but hot-headed.

I really love the "flower petal" idea too, it feels deep. ;) I hope you're still working on the next chapter (I'm a slow writer, too, so I understand lol), good luck. :)
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